Wonderful! Because you told how many steps there were to each bedroom, I thought she was going to the princess's room, then checked that off and decided she was going to rat out the princess's tryst to the queen. Nope, still going. That innocuous detail about the steps to the rooms was beautifully placed and perfect for keeping the reader guessing. Also, the two voices were like the circling of the stairs. You did a terrific job with the prompt of the person in the background. I enjoyed reading your entry more and more as it went along! Perfect ending. :-)
Thank you, Tara! I've wanted to do something like this for a while - having characters identify with their roles (Hero, Foil, Villain, etc) but I haven't quite worked out a longer version yet. You know, I didn't even think about the two voices and the twirling staircase, but I'm glad it worked out so nicely! Hopefully I can figure out something similar for the next rendition. Or just reuse the stairs.
Wonderful! Because you told how many steps there were to each bedroom, I thought she was going to the princess's room, then checked that off and decided she was going to rat out the princess's tryst to the queen. Nope, still going. That innocuous detail about the steps to the rooms was beautifully placed and perfect for keeping the reader guessing. Also, the two voices were like the circling of the stairs. You did a terrific job with the prompt of the person in the background. I enjoyed reading your entry more and more as it went along! Perfect ending. :-)
Thank you, Tara! I've wanted to do something like this for a while - having characters identify with their roles (Hero, Foil, Villain, etc) but I haven't quite worked out a longer version yet. You know, I didn't even think about the two voices and the twirling staircase, but I'm glad it worked out so nicely! Hopefully I can figure out something similar for the next rendition. Or just reuse the stairs.
Have you seen the announcements in Notes for the Enchanted by the Book contest? Might be another place for this work to shine. 😊
No, Notes is keeping it from me! I'll have to see what I can find out... thanks for the heads up! :)
This should work: https://open.substack.com/pub/enchantedinamerica/p/the-enchanted-book-contest-enter?r=1mk0zn&utm_campaign=post&utm_medium=web
Ah, thank you!
I did not expect this ending at all. Well done.
Thank you, Leigh!