Finding the three rings.
The frozen in place feeling was so well done. INSTANT tension. You're really pressurizing this thing. I can't wait to read more!
I immediately love this reaction, “For a second, I'm infuriated.”
As the reader I’m not upset at the empty tent, only even more intrigued, but I am right there with the narrator and like her even more.
“The clown takes a step forward and tilts his painted face one way, then the other.” This will never be a not scary image.
I am really enjoying the pragmatism and the ‘gotta get out of here’ vibe. Really, really curious to see how this will play out.